Two shorts with great screenplays:
Vicky and Sam from
Nuno Rocha on
Vimeo.
I really enjoyed the writing on this short because of the way it explores writing a screenplay in a screenplay. It takes you through the key points and how they may of came up with the idea for a screenplay by producing what they done as one. This is what draws me to this short, the inception style, of how the concequences of the writers brainstorming effect and coincide with the characters actions. This makes for an engaging story line watching the cause and effect of the writers in action and also the love interest of what the actual screenplay would of been about. I think its a clever idea and works really well, it incoorperates comedy with the seriousness of the actual story up until the very end. Its like there are infact two narratives which run along side eachother and then in the end cross paths to tie each story up and for that reason i really like it.
The second screenplay i enjoyed because of the way it engages you without the use of dialogue. It presents a boring mundane society and one mans escape from that. I like this short also due to the shot types used such as when the man is waiting for the bus at around 3 minutes, The style of everything in this piece is really nice, from the colour pallett used to emphasise the mundane lifestyle, The sound effects used cutting the silence and again showing the plain lifestyle the protagonist leads. As a whole it was engaging for me, it intregued me, for what is he going to do to to break this cycle, The way everything in the short was portayed to be so very basic and depressing. Finally i think i sympathised with the main character, despite his lack of words, him as a whole tells me so much, his actions his movements, at no point throughout the whole thing did my attention diverge from the wonder of this lifestyle, the acting played a big part in making this piece work so well.
Audience Research
My story portrays a innocent guy working his daily routine of getting up and going to work, however one day, on his break, he is sitting on a bench when he comes across a flash drive. Naturally my main character is curious so after work he takes it home to plug into his computer only to discover the contents of the flashdrive are infact of high level importants and has alerted two people obviously the good guy and the bad guys! at this point the guys friends are round and he is explaining what has happened and there is knock at the door (who do you think?) yes you guessed it the only people it could be, the bad guys! so after a short period of chasing my main character & friends, it winds up at an abandonded warehouse, what is he going to do? surely hes trapped!!! no, of course not the good guy has came to save the day and would you believe it just in the nick of time!
I researched some similar screenplays to mine and found a good comparison with channel 4's 'Top Boy' which follows the same gritty urban theme as what my short does. I believe that my short will also follow the same demographic as 'Top Boy' with the target audience aiming to be from late teens to young adults as these are the sort of people who could relate to the characters and their circumstances, especially with the use of slang in dialogue as what i would use. The phychographics would tend to be similar aswell, with the urban lifestyle and what would be deemed good music to the chosen demographic. I asked a set of media students on their opinion and they thought that my story could be relatable in the sense of bringing ordinary people like them out in to something extraordinary. A majority of people i asked thought that by using these urban, ordinary teenagers and putting them in a situation out of the ordinary, it would be a good as it has the potential to happen to them, like a fantasy. I tried to make my characters as relateable as possible using slang and the occasional swear word as this allows my target audience to sympathise and relate and therefore engage them into the storyline. In relation to my screenplay i asked a group of people in my target audience if the theme would be something that would interest them. The response was as i expected as a majority say that it would be a genre (crime, action) that they rate highly. One responsee said 'I would be interested in watching a short like this as it has a fast pace story line and with the action it would keep me watching' which was good news for me as he was a perfect fit for my primary target audience and even fitted some of the demographic and phychographics i tried to portray in my characters.
The theme of my short would follow technology in the flashdrive mixed with action, it would be like the film clockstoppers where an important piece of technology (time stopping watch) needs to be kept from getting into the wrong hands. (
http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/technology-25808189) . To sum up ive used a current topic as my theme of the technology and then combined it with real people in their real lives which i believe would make a really good story.

Ive set my short in a more realistic setting of Gorleston with the terraced housing and more urban environment as people would relate to this a lot more and its not as over the top as clock stoppers. The character is in fact based on a close friend of mine whom of which actually lives in gorleston in the area where it would be set. I think by doing this and using a real person to base psycho and demographics on it is as realistic as it can get. For my idea ive taken the most realistic situation as possible, a local area and real people and their own values, and concocted it with a extraordinary situation to draw the audience as much into the digesis as possible. Technology as something which is developing all the time in this age and by using it my story again i think it could even be perceived as real and if i was to say it was based on a true story i dont think anyone would batter and eyelid. Tech is something you cannot avoid in this day and age and is more and more embedded in our daily lives with the introduction of smart phones and appliances and i think my story will make people realize that it is infact dangerous. Even recently (20th of January) a south Korean bank accidentally leak personal information of 20 million customers, and this is something which interests me with the danger of technology (

I would say that the screenplay in hand is a clockstoppers (with the use of technology and keeping it from the wrong hands) concocted with the channel 4 Tv series Top Boy (with the urban gritty setting and realistic characters and dialogue). With these to media texts i can relate to my short, The genre and narrative follows that of clockstoppers with tha action and sciencey techno-logic narrative agent to drive the plot forward. The character and location would be loosly based on Top Boy by using real people and their own values to the environment that they are in. The location is a real setting not made up by hollywood with special lighting a proper local area used everyday as in top boy and by drawing real local people again like TopBoy, it makes for a better storyline not like some fancy actor pretending to be something they are not.